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Peeper

I love this whole short-story response thingy, and I’m throwing my hat into the ring.  This is a response in the chain of the follwing stories from:

I suggest that you read each of these first before reading the following passage that I call, ‘Peeper’.

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Fine stripes, wide stripes, pin stripes, vertical, horizontal, and no matter what, she always looks so beautiful. Looking through her window I am concealed from her as I watch intently while she moves back and forth from the bed to the wardrobe. Shaking, folding, packing; she is so graceful in everything she does. Refocusing my binoculars, I gaze upon my beloved.

I want her, but she longs for him, and he craves the company of someone else. I observe everything she does, and every aspect of her life. The vantage point from the abandoned house allows for excellent viewing of my beloved. Her life is empty, and she searches everywhere to fill that void, yet she does not see me. She comes, he goes, then some other man comes, and she thinks no one else knows.

She spoke to me once, but I was overwhelmed. Nearly speechless, my words were muffled, and I stumbled and fumbled trying to say something simple. Her gaze was magnetic, drawing me in and hypnotising me with her beautiful brown eyes. Lost in her trance I was not able to speak to her, but I keep her in my sight and I watch over her. She feels safe with me here, even if she doesn’t know it.

 

 

17 Responses to “Peeper”

  1. lol…soon you might be the milk man.

    Raptus - July 27, 2009 at 11:57 am

  2. I read CD. Valere’s response alone….did anyone write from the “lesbian in love with the woman” point of view? If not Silver dragon should have…showing the advantages of being a bad husband.

    Raptus - July 27, 2009 at 12:00 pm

  3. seeker – husband
    sig.guy – wife
    bakannal – gay lover of husband
    stolid – who the wife is sexing with
    silver dragon – stalker

    I love Silver Dragon’s bit.

    stolidcharisma - July 27, 2009 at 12:29 pm

  4. niceness. u peepin and wankin off aint’t ya…

    bakannal - July 27, 2009 at 2:34 pm

  5. I actually didn’t think of that. I was going to add a part where he had a gun of some sort, but I decided to leave that out.

    Bro, this tagged story thing seems like it could be a lot of fun. But riddle me this, bakannal; how the fuck do you keep your shit under 100 words? Goddamn, that’s difficult. I only wrote 3 paragraphs and I clocked in at 212 words.

    Silver Dragon - July 27, 2009 at 2:55 pm

  6. Bakannal probably has a limited vocab.

    stolidcharisma - July 27, 2009 at 3:50 pm

  7. perhaps my bit, done a long time ago can be the end all of the story.

    http://thesoulstealer.wordpress.com/2009/07/27/the-prologue-redemption/

    thesoulstealer - July 27, 2009 at 4:30 pm

  8. SD you do it like this

    I got this bitchy girlfriend who is cheating on me with a bastard. She complains that I’m more interested in writing stories than in her. So I purchased a gun and plan to finish her off. I took her to dinner then to the summer cabin she used to cheat in. Shot her, text the bastard using her phone, hid behind the door. When he arrive point the gun to his head, make him write a suicide note. Shot him at close range, put the gun in his hand, fire off another round in the bitch and leave.

    98 words

    thesoulstealer - July 27, 2009 at 4:41 pm

  9. Nice, SD. Pure and sweet (never mind that nasty Kwesi).

    c.d.valere - July 27, 2009 at 5:13 pm

  10. what’s wrong with wanking?

    bakannal - July 27, 2009 at 7:06 pm

  11. SD like them old pervert from de neighbourhood :D

    thesoulstealer - July 27, 2009 at 8:12 pm

  12. …creepy. Interesting but..creepy. Very vivid in the last paragraph.

    Seeker - July 27, 2009 at 9:27 pm

  13. Gasp.. did soulstealer just try to kill me?

    stolidcharisma - July 27, 2009 at 10:29 pm

  14. This was fun. Thanks to Seeker for the start and C.D. Valere for inspiring the challenge. I’m actually thinking of changing the blog format to strictly flash-fiction.

    Silver Dragon - July 28, 2009 at 6:31 am

  15. This is some R.kelly shit right here……..thanks for the entertainment guys. Waiting for the surprising end if there is any

    Ace - July 28, 2009 at 11:51 am

  16. [...] this is the continuation of Peeper by the Silver [...]

    little death « The Soul Stealer - July 28, 2009 at 3:31 pm

  17. STRIPES:

    I like stripes. Stripes are certain. Stripes cannot be compromised. Stripes, in whichever fashion, will be true to you in spite of how you treat them. Stripes will never betray you. Stripes never intermingle, never gossip. Stripes are as safe as a house…

    I approached Room 111 – burnished brass numbers – glinting softly in the claustrophobic lobby’s pale light. Strange, I thought…what are the odds? 111 – Stripes? – Subconscious calm prevailed. I turned to her, she smiled nervously, I smiled reassuringly….

    Tall and slim, ample breasts obvious behind that thin, shimmering blouse. Those legs – DAMN! -they go on and on and on – what are the odds – Stripes? Nah, they have the ability to contradict and compromise. Stripes will never do that.

    I turned the round door knob. A sliver of that pale light bounced off my diamond encrusted wedding band. A pang of guilt enveloped my body. A brief pause…goddammit! She’s perceptive…She noticed? Shit! – Wait, what’s this?! – She encircled my arm…pushed door 111…and led me into the dark abyss. What a whore…my wife’s best friend!

    The light switched on, almost automatically. The bed, the only object which caught my eye…blue striped sheets…matching pillow cases…almost reassuringly inviting…My guilt dissipated…I know those stripes would never betray my betrayal…They would keep my secret safe…

    The Adjudicator - July 30, 2009 at 10:47 am


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